Talk:Danica Maupoissant

Plagiarism
Hi admin.

I will be looking at redoing this page so that it does not violate any plagiarism clauses. Please do not delete it

Carter 305 (talk) 19:37, December 10, 2016 (UTC)


 * Thanks! In practice, we wouldn't delete a page like this as it has/had non-copied content. I've put a Working tag on the page in case you're still tinkering with it. Feel free to fix up other problems with the page (the real-world point-of-view, the lack of references, the lack of past tense). If you have any questions, just ask here or one of us admins. Welcome to the wiki! — BadCatMan (talk) 04:09, December 11, 2016 (UTC)

Okay. Im moving through this at a decent page. I'm going to re-read the Novels again just to get the chronological sequence correct. Will add the citations as soon as i finish the actual text. I will edit as i read, so it shouldn't take me longer than a few days

Sorry forgot to sign the last post

Carter 305 (talk) 18:53, December 11, 2016 (UTC)

Wording
This wording really needs some clarification: "After some difficulty, wherein Danica attempted to seduce Cadderly, he managed to convince her to hold off on it, allegedly so the event could be properly documented for future students.". The grammar rules for what a pronoun refers to don't apply directly, but they're helpful: Because it's ambiguous, a pronoun has to be placed where it refers to the closest immediate antecedent. For example, in "The car ran over a soda can, crushing it flat" it's obvious the car isn't crushed flat - the can is. But in "My car ran into his car, totaling it", it's less obvious that "his car" got totaled... and that's why the rule exists, to make things clear. Two sentences earlier, the Iron Skull attempt was obviously being referred to. In the next sentence, Danica beating Rufo bloody for "the interruption" (vs "interrupting her Iron Skull attempt") is already getting ambiguous. Unless you've read the book, it would be a lot more logical to think she does it because he tried to sexually assault her. By the time we get to the sentence I quoted (at the start of this talk addition), the Iron Skull attempt is almost forgotten and it looks like "it" refers to Danica attempting to seduce Cadderly. Which leads back to why that sentence threw me for a loop: Cadderly might be able to convince Histra to wait for sex so it could be properly documented for future students... but I doubt he could convince Danica. XD Yet that's how the sentence reads. The direct antecedent of "it" is Danica trying to seduce Cadderly, so it sounds like "the event" is as well. If it's not clear, here's the sentence again with emphasis added: "After some difficulty, wherein Danica attempted to seduce Cadderly, he managed to convince her to hold off on it, allegedly so the event could be properly documented for future students."


 * Feel free to rewrite it to make it better. That's what wikis are all about. ~ Lhynard (talk) 20:51, 24 November 2022 (UTC)


 * I wrote the sentence. I thought it was fairly clear and the common-sense reading, but I was trying to revise and simplify the existing text while summarising the events of the novel, and may have been too familiar with it. Anyway, I've revised to "he managed to convince her to hold off on attempting the Iron Skull" to clarify it.


 * And yeah, there's no need for an essay; if you see a problem, just feel free to click the Edit button and fix it. ~ BadCatMan (talk) 00:51, 25 November 2022 (UTC)